The use of first person in this manuscript is a major distraction. Although the first person is acceptable if used judiciously, the word 'I' appears so much in this manuscript that the implication is that the author is more important than the research . . . The manuscript must be rewritten to reduce the personal references. The present manuscript is simply so self-indulgent and so incredibly poorly presented that in-depth evaluation of the content and the meaning of the work is impossible.
This is well presented, crisp and clear. I would prefer removal of the first person at the beginning, leading to a more scholarly presentation. Very impressive literature review.
The first paper was accepted for publication: the second paper was not.
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