Being Specific

Work with a partner or a group.

1. Choose one person to be the secretary.

2. Rewrite the paragraph below to make the details more specific. Don't change the first sentence. Rewrite the other sentences, and write at least ten new sentences to add more details.

3. Check your paragraph against the Paragraph Checklist (on page 78).

The Limousine

The limousine was quite luxurious. It was big. The outside was nice. The inside was nice. It had nice seats. It had an entertainment center. It also had food and beverages. Our ride was fun.

Rewriting Long Paragraphs

The Limousine The limousine was quite luxurious. It was at least fifteen feet long. It had six doors and could carry eight passengers comfortably. The outside of the limousine . .



^ Check the paragraph form. (Does the paragraph look like the model on page 4?)


_J Does the paragraph begin with a topic sentence?

Does the paragraph have specific details? ~ Are the specific details in space order?


| Check the capital letters.

Q Is there a period at the end of all the sentences?


] Check the sentences. Do they have at least one subject and one verb, and do they express a complete thought?

Does the paragraph contain both simple and compound sentences?

EH lj Check for comma splices.

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