He said she said

Take a look at the following passages and decide which you think works best:

Passage A

'You know I hate fish,' he said, 'Yet every week without fail, you insist on trying to make me eat it,' he complained, throwing down his knife and fork in disgust.

Passage B

'You know I hate fish.' He threw his knife and fork down in disgust. 'Yet every week without fail, you insist on trying to make me eat it.'

In fact, both passages work perfectly well but in Passage A, the words 'he said' and 'he complained' are completely superfluous.

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