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By seven o'clock that evening, they had left the helicopter in the village and gathered a mountain rescue team of fifteen men. Michael felt disheartened and scared for his friend's safety. Slowly they ascended the mountain, scouring the numerous paths for Peter.The only sounds were crunching footsteps and the crackle of static on the walkie-talkies that the rescue workers carried to talk to each other. The mountainside was an eerie place after nightfall and gradually Michael started to wonder whether they would ever find Peter at all.

¡E|51 Suddenly Michael heard a voice come over one of the walkie-talkies, "We've got him. We're taking him down."

|f|6 | "I'm sorry," said Michael to his friend later in the warm safety of the hospital room, "I didn't realise it would take so long."

Peter smiled painfully. "It's okay", he croaked, still weak from his ordeal, "I'm just glad to be here, alive."

|G|7| The doctors decided to keep Peter at the hospital for the night in case of complications with his leg. Before leaving, Michael looked down at his friend and patted his shoulder as, silently, they both vowed never to go walking in the mountains again.

33 Read the main body of the story below, as well as the different beginnings and endings. Which techniques have been used in each of the beginnings and endings? Who narrates the story?

A It was a normal Friday afternoon in the sleepy village of Lishwood and I had gone to the bank as usual to withdraw some money from my account so that I could pay for my grocery shopping. How was I to know that I'd be enduring the most frightening experience of my life in only a few minutes' time?

B I just knew I shouldn't have gone out that Friday afternoon. I'd had a strange feeling all morning, a feeling that something was going to happen, but I told myself, "Don't be stupid, Ida. you and your funny feelings! - pull yourself together and go and get the groceries.'' So I did, and you'll never guess what happened!

C You know how someone feels when he is about to pay for his grocery shopping and finds his wallet is almost empty Mumbling a poor excuse I headed for the bank, not prepared at all for what I was about to experience there.

1 was waiting patiently in the queue when suddenly two men pulling black masks over their heads, rushed through the front door and began shouting and waving guns in the air. "This is a robbeiy." veiled one of the masked men. "Do as we say and no one will get hurt!" The other bank robber herded us into a corner of the room and ordered us to lie face-down on the floor.

1 was terrified. My whole body froze in fear. Someone helped me down to the ground where all the other customers were huddled together, hardly even daring to breathe in case the men decided to carry out their threat and start shooting.

The cashiers were remarkably calm but I suppose their training had prepared them for such a situation. They busily emptied the contents of their tills into a bag the robbers had pushed over the counter to them. I kept expecting to hear the wailing of sirens as the police hurried to rescue us. but there was only an unbearable silence.

Almost as suddenly as they had entered, the masked raiders grabbed their bag and left the building, jumping into a beige getaway car. Minutes later, the police arrived. Several officers | took off in their cars to see if they could catch the criminals.

1 As I entered the grocer's I felt strangely uneasy. It was then that I heard a sharp voice hissing: "This is a robbery!"

2 As I was walking back to the grocer's I kept thinking of what had happened minutes before. Slowly I opened the door, only to come face to face with two armed masked men. "Lightning never strikes twice in the same place." I thought before I fainted.

3 Would you be prepared to experience the same thing twice in less than an hour? I wasn't, but I had no choice when, on | ^^ opening the grocer's door. I came face to face with two masked men.

while others tried to calm us down enough so that they could take coherent statements.

After a while, the feelings of shock and fear began to subside. I was still a bit shaken, but I had recovered from the ordeal enough to give the police my account of what had happened,] then went to collect my shopping.

34 Read the model below and correct the highlighted words. Write S for spelling, WO for word order, G for grammar, P for punctuation or WW for wrong word. Read the story again and put the events in chronological order; then retell the story without flashback narration. Suggest a suitable title for the story.

C was

As he\got off the train, he looked up and down the platform. There(ffier^)no one there and, as he stood listening to the sound of the train rat tling off into the distance, he begun to feel a little worried. His brother had promised to meet him, but was nowhere to be seen. Stood there checking his watch and anxiously [jeering into a darkness beyond the station, Matt felt terribly alone.

Matt Black was a merchant seaman. Ten years previously he has left home to go at sea because there were little jobs in the village which be grew up. After being so long at sea, he had made enough monev to return back and set up a small business. He had been nervous about his familie's reaction to his homecoming, but one telephone call had been enough to put his mind at rest. They sounded such excited that he was coming back. His mother had even cried, that Matt had found embarrassing.

| Now, standing in the deserted platform, he did not know | what to think. It was two in the morning and, since it was no I telephone, he decided to walk the live miles to the village. I Somebodv will pick him up, he thought. So, dragging his two huge bags behind him, he set off down the narrow countrv lane. Alter walking only for ten minutes, one of bis bags caught on a stone and tore open, spilling the contents over the muddy road, (.old, tired and now bad-tempered, he sat on a rock for a while. \ this was not the way he had imagined his return. | Once the lights of his village came into view, his mood lifted j slightly. He wandered whether would he be able to readjust to f lile in a small communitv alter years on board a ship and his | experience of so many foreign cultures. But, he decided, this was where he wanted to be, and his pace quickened as he approached to the family home.

Walking up the drive, he was noticing the flickering light of a television in a downstairs window. Through the open curtains I he could see his brother, asleep fast on the sofa. He taped on the | glass and his brother woke up, dazed and confused. "Matt!" he j shouted excited. "Oh no, 1 fell asleep! How did vou get here?" Matt thought back to when the two of them leaved there as teenagers and, with a sigh of relief, said to himself, "At least some things haven't changed."

35 Look at the following composition task instructions and answer the questions below.

a) • Write a story that begins or ends with the words: "It had all been a case of mistaken identity."

• What sort of narrative (e.g. mystery, adventure, human drama, etc) does the title suggest to you?

• Would you use flashback narration? Why/Why not?

• Does the topic require specialised knowledge and/or vocabulary you may not have?

• Can you suggest a possible plot using this sentence to begin your story?

b) Write a story entitled "The Locked Door".

• What sort of narrative story (e.g. mystery, adventure, human drama, etc) does the title suggest to you?

• What techniques would you use to begin and end your story?

• Is it necessary for you to write .this composition using flashback narration? Why/ Why not?

• What time words/phrases would you use to link the events?

• Can you suggest a possible plot?

36 Choose ONE of the composition tasks above, and write a complete plan with notes. Then write the composition in 300 to 400 words.

A Describe a well-known holiday destination and account for its popularity.

1 What kind of composition is this?

2 What are the key words?

3 Which paragraph plan would you follow?

4 Which tenses would you use? Why?

5 What style does the composition need to be written in? Why?

6 How could you begin/end your composition?

B Describe a prominent person from the past whom you wish you could meet, giving reasons for your choice.

1 What kind of composition is this?

2 What are the key words?

3 Which paragraph plan would you follow?

4 Which tenses would you use? Why?

5 Which aspects of description would you include?

6 is it necessary to justify the reasons for your choice? If so, think of the possible reasons and justify them.

C Write a short story entitled "The Opportunity".

1 Is it necessary to decide on a plot before writing your story?

2 Would you use flashback narration? Why/Why not?

3 Which information would you give in order to set the scene?

4 What tenses would you use to set the scene?

5 Which techniques would you use to begin and end your story? Give examples.

6 Can you suggest a plot? How would you present the events chronologically?

D Describe a visit to a restaurant in your country and give your impressions of the atmosphere, decor, service and food.

1 What are the key words?

2 What information would you give when describing the restaurant?

3 Would you use narrative techniques? If so, ; examples.

4 What paragraph plan would you follow?

5 Would your composition be written in a forma informal style? Why?

6 What descriptive techniques would you use?

E Describe the activities and atmosphere at a ceiebrati or festival in your country.

1 What kind of composition is this?

2 What are the key words?

3 Would your composition be written in a forma informal style? Why?

4 What tenses would you use? Why?

5 Would you use narrative and/or descriptive t< niques? If so, give examples.

6 Which paragraph plan would you follow?

F Write a short story beginning with the words: "A1 reading the letter, she realised her life would never the same again."

1 What should you decide on before starting to w your story?

2 Would you use flashback narration? Why/Why r

3 Which tenses would you use throughout your st(

4 Which technique(s) could you use to end your sto

5 Which techniques would you include in orde: make your stoiy more interesting?

6 Can you suggest a plot using flashback narratio

G Describe a typical market in your country and accot for its continuing success.

1 What kind of composition is this?

2 What are the key words?

3 Which tenses would you use? Why?

4 Would you refer to the senses in order to desci the place? If so, give examples.

5 How would you make your description more in esting?

6 What reasons would you present which could account for the market's success? Provide justification.

H Describe an educational visit you have been on and say what you think you have learned from this experience.

1 What are the key words?

2 What could be described as "an educational visit"?

3 Would you use narrative techniques? If so, give examples.

4 Which tenses would you use? Why?

5 What aspects of description would you mention? Give examples.

6 Which paragraph plan would you follow?

I Describe your first meeting with a famous person and explain in what ways you found him or her to be different from your expectations.

1 What are the key words?

2 What tenses would you use? Why?

3 Which words would you use to express contrast?

4 What aspects of description would you mention?

5 Is this a pure descriptive composition of a person? Why/Why not?

6 Which paragraph plan would you follow?

J Describe an important twentieth-century invention and explain how it has changed people's lives.

1 What kind of composition is this?

2 What are the key words?

3 What inventions can you talk about?

4 How detailed should your description of the invention be?

5 What aspects of description would you mention? Why?

6 Which paragraph plan would you follow?

K Write a story ending with the words: "How could I have been so wrong?" he wondered.

1 Would you use flashback narration? Why/Why not?

2 What information would you give to set the scene?

L Describe a person whom you regard as successful and define the qualities needed to achieve success.

What are the key words?

What tenses would you use? Why?

What aspects of description would you include?

Must the description be of someone who is a)alive;

b)well known?

What qualities would you mention? Which paragraph plan would you follow?

M Write a story beginning or ending with the words: "He took a deep breath and knocked on the door."

1 Would you use flashback narration? Why/Why not?

2 What should you decide on before starting to write your story?

3 If you use the given sentence to begin the story, can you suggest a plot without flashback narration?

4 If you use the given sentence to end the story, can you suggest a plot without flashback narration? What tenses would you use?

5 If you use the given sentence to end the story, can you suggest a plot with flashback narration? What tenses would you use?

N Describe your most prized possession and explain why you value it so much.

1 What kind of composition is this? What are the key words?

2 What tenses would you use? Why?

3 What type of possession could you describe?

4 What information would you give in order to describe this possession?

5 What paragraph plan would you follow?

3 Which technique(s) would you use to begin your story?

4 What tenses would you use throughout your story?

5 Which techniques would you include in order to make your story more interesting?

6 Can you suggest a suitable plot?

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Responses

  • peter kastner
    How do i write a composition beginning with 'my purse was gone!'?
    8 years ago
  • kia
    How to write compo flashback?
    7 years ago
  • madihah
    How to continue a composition after a flashback?
    7 years ago
  • Karys
    How could i have been so wrong composition?
    7 years ago

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