my dialogue - example #1
Jesus, you startled me. I wasn't expecting you here.
It's been a real day for expectations. Where were you? I've been waiting here for an hour. You didn't leave a note or -
I wasn't planning on going anywhere -I can see that. Where's your coat? I left the house in a hurry. I ... um ... my mother ... The hospital reached you? God, I'm sorry. That's why -The hospital?
They called me when they couldn't get you. I don't understand. Your mother. You said -
I ran out to buy some flowers for her. She's been so down. For three hours you've been buying flowers?
And then I drove around. I've had ... a lot on my mind. But I'm fine now. Fine. You didn't go by the hospital?
No. Look, I'm freezing. Let's go inside. Why did the hospital call? Does the doctor need my signature for more tests?
We have to go to the hospital.
I've had a terrible -
We have to go to the hospital. Now. The rest of your family is already there.
Oh. Oh, God. Mom's all right, isn't she? Oh, Christ, she isn't. I'm being punished ... she's dead.
NOTE: He came home to tell her that the hospital called him because it couldn't reach her, to tell her that her mother died. she has been having an affair, and broke it off today. You'll notice that this has some awkward places in it. You expect that in first draft.
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