Twister

I see the farmer in the fields and hear the thunder. I watch as the lightning illuminates his path back toward the house.

I listen to his wife calling him.

Now I witness his children leaving the shelter.

Everyone runs toward the funnel of their lives.

As you can see, the / in the poem lacks a significant role. (Substitute we for I and you'll get the same result.)

As a rule, if you can eliminate the first person in a poem — in effect, eliminating the narrator—and the poem remains basically the same, you don't need to use I or we:

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