Sample Timed Writing Essay

See the column section under Generating and Organizing Ideas to see how this student did his prewriting.

During their first year of driving, between, one-third and one-half of teen drivers will be involved in an accident. California has considered enacting a limited licensing program,, which would restrict teens to driving on surface streets during daylight hours with, only one teen passenger. After two years of a limited license, teens can then receive (California should adopt a limited licensse program for the safety of teen drivers as well as others.

Hawing a two-year limited licensing policy would increase the safety for teen drivers. One of the most difficult and dangerous things for a new driver is freeway, driving. Under the proposed system, teens would be restricted to driving surface streets^ thus eliminating free/way driving. This will allow tee/ns to develop, their driving skills and gain experience before driving on freeways. Another difficult aspect of driving for teens is night (driving,. It is difficult to ssee at night when you are

■ an driver,. The new license, policy would restrict teens to driving only during daylight hours eliminating night driving altogether. Again, teens would be allowed to gain experience at night. Both of these restrictions on teen drivers will leead to fewer accidents and fatalities. This will be extremely beneficial to all of the teen drivers in California.

On addition to increasing safety for teen drivers, the limiite/d licensing program will also benefit drivers with full licenses. Under this program,, teens will be, gradually, eased into driving. By the time the teens receive their full license, they will be experienced, safer drivers. The normal drivers will be involved in fewer accidents due to the fact that everyone on the road is a more qualified and experienced driver. The restriction >

having one teen, passenger in the car will also

■ increase safety. For example, there will be fewer people to be hurt and killed in an accident involving teen, drivers with passengers. Also, having, only one passenger means that there will be fewer passengers talking to and distracting the teen driver from driving. This distraction can often times lead to accidents. The passengers and all of the drivers on the road will benefit from the provisions of the limited licensing systems.

Introduction

Lead gives a fact to lend urgency or power to the thesis.

Thesis states the writer's position that California should adopt a limited license program and indicates the direction of his argument--"for the safety of teens and others."

Topic Sentence relates to the thesis-the limited license would "increase the safety of teens"

Topic Sentence relates to the thesis-the limited license would "increase the safety of others."

Many arguments can be made for issuing a full license to si/xteen-year-<

One of these arguments is that teens are limited to where they can go and when.

"Teens cannot take the freeway or drive at night, restricting them greatly to where they go and when. Also, teeen cannot give more than one other teeen a node, limiting.

the passengers. Also, it can be argued that teens are robbed of their independence and freedom. People argue that teens would have to depend too much on adults and be limited to what they can do. Another argument thaat can be made is that this limited licensing, system wiH be ineffective in the fact that teens will ¡break the laws to do as they please.

Although these are all valid arguments against the limited licensing program,

the positives that would come from it greatly outweigh the negatives. Saving lives

is far more important then giving teeens the full pprivileeges, of driving. Teens can live with a few small inconveniences, if it means saving others lives as well as their own.

■Topic Sentence address the other side of the issue.

Conclusion answers the opposition arguments with a strong statement that lives are more important than convenience.

Printed with permission from Brian Moore who wrote this timed writing for the District Writing Performance Assessment, March, 1998.

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