Give extra information its own place

In English, once we find the subject of the sentence (the noun or pronoun at the beginning), we expect to find the verb close by. If extra information takes us off on a tangent, we may lose track of what the sentence is all about. When the extra information ends, and we are back in the main sentence, we may get back on track - and then forget the tangential information.

Don't put extra "stuff" between the subject and the verb. Case Study 8-1, Untangling a convoluted sentence, shows you both how tangled a sentence can get in web content and how you can untangle it.

Case Study 8-1 Untangling a convoluted sentence

Do you find it easy to grab the information from the following sentence?

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f^S The first sentence is 26 ' J words - not overly long, but ^ it has too many tangents in the middle.

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