In English, once we find the subject of the sentence (the noun or pronoun at the beginning), we expect to find the verb close by. If extra information takes us off on a tangent, we may lose track of what the sentence is all about. When the extra information ends, and we are back in the main sentence, we may get back on track - and then forget the tangential information.
Don't put extra "stuff" between the subject and the verb. Case Study 8-1, Untangling a convoluted sentence, shows you both how tangled a sentence can get in web content and how you can untangle it.
Case Study 8-1 Untangling a convoluted sentence
Do you find it easy to grab the information from the following sentence?
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f^S The first sentence is 26 ' J words - not overly long, but ^ it has too many tangents in the middle.
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